Just wanted to share some new stuff with you guys and wanted to get some.feedback. You can find me on Pandora under Markpain
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I heard two of your songs:
"The Building Is On It's (sic) Feet" and "The Rarest Form Of Hip-Hop".
Hate to be that guy - but the title of your first track is mis-spelled. Should be "on its feet".
I'm not a hiphop guy, but two things stand out to me:
1) the level on the vocals is too low. In the Building track, I had to strain to listen to what you were saying over the sampled guitar riff. "Rarest" had the same issue - you have a decent sounding voice whether rapping or singing, syncopate well, and what you were saying was rhythmically interesting. Not sure why you buried the rap in the mix, a decent engineer would be able to separate the sounds out more. Your voice is an asset - needs to be more front and center. You have a gift, but we have to try and dig through the riff to find it.
2) you did vary the backing track a bit by cutting out the bass drum, or pushing a slight variation during your chorus parts, but song structure is pretty key - your intro needs to come together and have a "and here we go" before the verses, same with the chorus - there needs to be some variation just before you change gears to the chorus. I don't know if it's because the "main riff" seems to repeat over and over, but I had to almost listen for the verse/chorus change, whereas in most songs there's some kind of obvious lead-up that indicates a gear-shift from A to B is about to happen.
You have some good potential, and the material you're using is well put together. But is just seems to be a wall of track, I can actually see in my mind's eye what this looks like on a DAW - almost for the most part four straight lines of WAV, with some parts chopped out momentarily.
Sharpen this up a bit, and you've got enough hook and vocal sound to really cook.
That's my two cents.
You're on the right track - I think with some minor tweaks, this will go from good to great.
Looking forward to the next track.